Twilight analysis is very important.
I think you’re right.
Her jargon makes me really uneasy as well. I can’t fully articulate why right now.
Lizzie, or Liss as she prefers to be known has some AWFUL writing habits. These make it harder for her to access future people to join her cult. They also make me tired and confused. I have a giant vocabulary but even sometimes I don’t know what the hell she’s talking about. She also tends to ramble and make it all about herself. She thinks she’s a pro writer, but she isn’t in the least.
First, WHEN she writes, she writes way too much, when she does write, which less and less each year. She takes 2 thousand words for what would only need 600. I often mentally just cut out the middle of her essay’s and they read perfectly fine. Using too many words exhausts your audience. Take her Fat Fashion essay this week. She fills it up with random useless “setting the scene” anecdotes instead of just getting to the point. That was a “Conversation” thread. She often also does it with her Fatstronauts and her Pro Choice essay’s. I simply do not have the time to read all that.
Secondly, she picks big words when little words would do. She doesn’t HATE things, she’s “Contemptuous”. She uses needlessly big words to get across small concepts. “Attendant” instead of “Present”, “Admonish” instead of “Caution”, “Cursory” instead of Offhand, and there are many many more examples. These little things alienate her future cult society. I’d personally prefer NOT to need a dictionary to read an article on a personal blog. I’d like to be able to read stuff and get her point without utilizing the dictionary. It just has gotta STOP!
Thirdly, she’s rather fast and lose with the swear words and I understand she is forever angry and needs to express it non stop. As a professional writer she should still control herself. It also could and probably has triggered her would be viewing audience. She often says things about “Safe Space” but it’s never space if you swear the whole time. She also loses power when she does NEED to swear. As a “professional” writer she could do way better.
Fourthly she tends to put herself in what she’s writing. I remember distinctly during the Trayvon essay’s she’d put her own feelings all over it. Not Trayvon’s parents, not him himself but HER and how she feels about it. Her problems with the privileged people, not the actual racist issues in society.
There is a simple run down of the ways I feel Liz is going wrong and alienating her possible future cult base. She is NOT the badass writer she thinks she is and she needs at least two good beta editors and some self control to get it to a level which would actually BE PUBLISHED in a paper. Imagine if she were a GOOD writer, though. Everything would be so much worst.
PS. Don’t mistake this post for me actually wanting Lizzie to succeed, I just need to get these things OUT. She needs a bunch of help and no wonder she doesn’t work for a key important Feminist magazine of her own which she doesn’t have to carry and moderate. edit, social work and MORE!
I think of it as the Anne Rice or Stephen King syndrome. When they had people who would critique or read their work in an objective way, they flourished. When it got to a point to where publishers gave them free reign, the quality subsided for ego.
Yeah, I mean, losing a sense of self to participate in an online community isn’t how I interpret that either.
Oh my sweet lady of marmalade that is hard to read.
I was talking about that with a friend the other night, when Giles called Willow a “rank amateur.” It worked on so many levels.
Also, way to fuck that up HH.
I read it exactly the same way Anon. Like this is an appalling thing that happened to an actual human being but they manage to make it all about Shakesville and some pretty far out imagined slights instead of the patient’s pain and the doctor’s woe is me fatphobia.